Pinckz Posted April 25, 2011 Share Posted April 25, 2011 (edited) _ Edited May 10, 2012 by Guest Feel free to contact me by Discord/PM/Email or, on Facebook Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Delta73 Posted April 25, 2011 Share Posted April 25, 2011 Great job man, very enjoyable, well done. I loved the art where Varric is stuck in the seat. You know their characters very well. I can hardly wait to see your descriptions of the Hanged Man! Ca'Aran Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Amidala Skywalker Posted April 25, 2011 Share Posted April 25, 2011 Nice. Great start, and like Delta said, good job with the characterizations! SHE MEANS TO END US ALL!!! DOOOOOOOOMMMMMM!!!!!!!!11eleventyone! There goes Ami's reputation of being a peaceful, nice person. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Tiana Calthye Posted April 26, 2011 Share Posted April 26, 2011 One nitpick: when you're using someone's name or a title in address, there needs to be a comma. ”œSame to you, Seeker, same to you.” Just when I thought it was over, I watched Tiana kick Almira in the head, effectively putting her out of her misery. I did not expect that. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Amidala Skywalker Posted April 26, 2011 Share Posted April 26, 2011 Ah, see, that's what I get for beta-reading when I'm half-asleep. I can't believe I missed those! Sorry about that, BW. I'll do better next time! SHE MEANS TO END US ALL!!! DOOOOOOOOMMMMMM!!!!!!!!11eleventyone! There goes Ami's reputation of being a peaceful, nice person. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Pinckz Posted April 26, 2011 Author Share Posted April 26, 2011 Ah, see, that's what I get for beta-reading when I'm half-asleep. I can't believe I missed those! Sorry about that, BW. I'll do better next time! You did fantastic Ami, we all miss commas sometimes. As for the comments, I really appreciate the praise. I think I am going to start off the next part of the chapter with a description of the Hanged Man to give people a little perspective, but aside from that I have an idea that might make this a little bit more interesting for the readers and for me. If it doesn't work then it doesn't work, but I am kind of interested in where it will go. I have already started it so I may have something by the end of the week for you Ami, but we will see. I do find it kind of funny though that I managed to make the info section about as long as the story. Feel free to contact me by Discord/PM/Email or, on Facebook Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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