Sanj-Misavj Posted May 15, 2009 Share Posted May 15, 2009 Title: A soldiers tale Rating: PG-13 Rated for: Languadge, mild gore Critique level: Low This is a WWII story. ”œCaptain!” That's Fernando, I found him in a Cambodian sewage pipe. His is a tragic tale of imaginary sea creatures and crack abuse. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Silas Posted June 23, 2009 Share Posted June 23, 2009 It was an interesting piece though I didn't really notice anything in the writing that made it stand out. Due to your critique level being low I'll leave it at the fact that there were a few grammatical errors that made me pause, but nothing too major. It felt kind of rushed. One note that you might take into consideration when writing in the future: Flashbacks are generally marked in some way, typically by italics or completely seperated from teh previous section. I was a bit confused when you just kind of jumped into it. Over all it was a nice little one-shot that got the point across. Proud member of the JNET Addicts Club since November '05 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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