Amidala Skywalker Posted February 15, 2011 Share Posted February 15, 2011 Yep, I, Ami, actually wrote some poetry that wasn't given to me as a challenge. Be amazed. This never happens. And it's because I am an awful poet. So this is very free-form...actually it's less poetry and more creative prose of some sort. But I'm posting it anyway. It actually reveals a lot about me, and I hope that maybe some of you can relate. ______ Everything is quiet. The featureless ocean blue sky Stretches endlessly overhead Passing into black eternity and yet Caressing the white-dusted mountains Like a mother cradling her child. The wind blows and I imagine My hair streaming out behind me As I stand on this lonely precipice. The air is crisp and impossibly fresh I feel as if I'm the first to ever breathe it. My soul shouts and sings praises But my voice is quiet. My eyes are wide As if they know this beauty cannot last forever. Soon I must return down this mountain Back to the cares and worries of life. I crave this solitude. There is nothing here but my and my Maker And I know in my heart that this view is for me A precious gift from my Lover And so I drink it in until I can't bear it anymore I will remember standing here The world laid out before me The sun shining on me The wind blowing all my cares away And my heart overflowing with perfect, unfathomable peace. SHE MEANS TO END US ALL!!! DOOOOOOOOMMMMMM!!!!!!!!11eleventyone! There goes Ami's reputation of being a peaceful, nice person. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lord Ar-Pharazon Posted February 15, 2011 Share Posted February 15, 2011 I thought it was fantastic. It reminded me of our Lord's blood, at least for me, as a hardcore Catholic, as well as it made me think of the stillness of prayer that I usually get best, when sitting in the back of an empty church, just meditating. So, well done. I'll the first to admit that I am horrendous at analyzing poetry, and I never seem to arrive at the poet's intended place. But I liked it. Very spiritual, and in a good way! [Associate of the Illinois Mafia since November 2002.] Member of the Four Horsemen Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
NavyGal Posted February 15, 2011 Share Posted February 15, 2011 Stunning! I love it. I don't know what you are talking about being a bad poet! It's all a lie! Everyone has a good poet in them. They just need to unleash it the right way. looking forward to tit One flash of my perfect chest and he'll be knocked out in a happytime daydream. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Delta73 Posted February 15, 2011 Share Posted February 15, 2011 It was great, I really enjoyed it. You are a great poet, don't let anyone else tell you otherwise. Ca'Aran Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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