Scorp Jedi Knight Posted November 5, 2008 Share Posted November 5, 2008 ((I think I did this in response to a challenge or something. I dunno. I can't remember. I just picked it up out of my folder and figured what they hey.)) HAN: This is not going to work. LUKE: Why didn't you say so before? HAN: I did say so before! Lieutenant Childsen was slightly taken back when the doors parted. For some reason the two escort troopers and the creature was facing the wrong way. That however wasn't as”¦ problematic as the fact there was that creature in front of him. Those wookiees were a dreadful species, meant only for menial labor at best and execution at any and all other times. Granted most other Aliens fell in the same category but, how could some one not despise a wookiee. He almost felt a sense of pity for the two stormtroopers escorting the thing. He took a step away from his console to approach the trio. ”œWhere are you taking this...thing?” Well, you could always just post something like "OMG GREAT FIC WOW!" Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
DarthBrendo Posted November 6, 2008 Share Posted November 6, 2008 Interesting take on a classic scene. I liked seeing things from the Imperial POVs for a change on this one. The descriptions were tight and you had this well thought out. The dialogue was accurate from the movie and you had the thoughts of the Imps sounding right, it was believable. Solid one shot. Well done. Member of Jnet Addict Club 12/05 Order of the Nocturnal Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Tiana Calthye Posted November 6, 2008 Share Posted November 6, 2008 Yeah, it could've done with a bit of proofreading, but I thought it was a solid oneshot and a good idea, carried off well, nice to see it from that perspective for a change. Just when I thought it was over, I watched Tiana kick Almira in the head, effectively putting her out of her misery. I did not expect that. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Amidala Skywalker Posted November 6, 2008 Share Posted November 6, 2008 I agree, well done. Could have used a quick proofreading, but I really enjoyed it. I especially liked the little sideswipe in there about stormies not being able to hit a huge target like Chewie. SHE MEANS TO END US ALL!!! DOOOOOOOOMMMMMM!!!!!!!!11eleventyone! There goes Ami's reputation of being a peaceful, nice person. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Anakin T Skywalker Posted November 7, 2008 Share Posted November 7, 2008 Your grammar needs a bit of cleaning up. You have a habit of writing run-on sentences and leaving out things like commas. Otherwise, great story, very entertaining. It seems familiar, theough, as if I've seen it before. Thanks, Tiana! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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