NavyGal Posted May 20, 2008 Share Posted May 20, 2008 Ok so I know this is the month for bad poetry but I wrote this before I read the challenges by Tiana. Anyway I wrote this the other day getting all kinda homesick for Finland and missing my friends and the whole exchange experience and I just started writing and this is what came out. Tell me what you think. ~~~~~~~~~~~ Friends discovered and loved We left behind; As a chapter ended In the book which is our life. A year of laughter and fun, Tears and sadness. Moments fleeting and precious In the book which is our life. As we journey forward; We remember and cherish, The people we met And experiences we shared. Never forgotten, But forever remembered. The country and peoples; The sights and sounds. Which were but a chapter, In the book which is our life. looking forward to tit One flash of my perfect chest and he'll be knocked out in a happytime daydream. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Anakin T Skywalker Posted May 20, 2008 Share Posted May 20, 2008 Very poignant and touching. Nice job. And perfect metaphor for a story-writing forum, too! Thanks, Tiana! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Dartha Athanth Posted May 20, 2008 Share Posted May 20, 2008 I almost thought this was going to be another bad poem, but the 1st stanza stopped me short. Hahahha. Ok that doesn't bode well for me after I come back from college I think i'm going to be college-sick everyday but at least I can read this! (Ok that's thinking too far ahead since I haven't even gone.) Still, nice poem! But perhaps the use of words could have been more varied - because this reminds me of some song that I cna't remember at the moment... Darsha Assant turned dark at 2734 posts. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Amidala Skywalker Posted May 20, 2008 Share Posted May 20, 2008 Great job, Nat. You captured the feeling perfectly for those of us who know what it feels like. Another chapter of my life is coming to a close as well, and I know that's how I'll always feel about this last year in Africa. Missed, but cherished. Bittersweet. Very nice, and I always love to see stuff by you. SHE MEANS TO END US ALL!!! DOOOOOOOOMMMMMM!!!!!!!!11eleventyone! There goes Ami's reputation of being a peaceful, nice person. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
NavyGal Posted May 20, 2008 Author Share Posted May 20, 2008 Thanks guys! Ami you will probably understand the feelings the best. And it doesn't really end. I've been home almost 6 months and I think it is just getting worse. Darsha be prepared... you might not find yourself homesick while in the US but when you get home you'll be homesick for the US probably. And yeah words more varied would work if I could remember words. Seriously my english is terrible from working at an international college where most students have little to no english. They make me dumber! looking forward to tit One flash of my perfect chest and he'll be knocked out in a happytime daydream. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Tiana Calthye Posted May 20, 2008 Share Posted May 20, 2008 This isn't bad poetry. What WE'RE writing is bad poetry. Good poem, very touching, better than all ours... Just when I thought it was over, I watched Tiana kick Almira in the head, effectively putting her out of her misery. I did not expect that. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Myth Hunter Posted January 16, 2009 Share Posted January 16, 2009 Awwwwwww, how sweeet. veyr touching But I'm out of cheesecake. Taking over JNet, 1 thread at a time. JNet Royalty Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
NavyGal Posted January 16, 2009 Author Share Posted January 16, 2009 Yayz! Robyn readed my poem! Robyn likeded my poem! w00t! Thankies to thee Robyn! looking forward to tit One flash of my perfect chest and he'll be knocked out in a happytime daydream. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Myth Hunter Posted January 16, 2009 Share Posted January 16, 2009 Nostalgic. I found it very nostalgic. Very heartwarming it spoke to me in a way I cannot descibe. It moved me, it made me miss something I no longer have. The colour, the wonder, the adventure have I covered everything yet? But I'm out of cheesecake. Taking over JNet, 1 thread at a time. JNet Royalty Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
NavyGal Posted January 16, 2009 Author Share Posted January 16, 2009 Me thinks that you are either drunk or sleep deprived... possibly both! But thankyou anyway! looking forward to tit One flash of my perfect chest and he'll be knocked out in a happytime daydream. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Myth Hunter Posted January 16, 2009 Share Posted January 16, 2009 its 2 am and iut was like 43 celcius today, and it s fridsy so I had a beers I stilldrove home and hold a cold one here at the cmp... or 3 what number is ths one anyway, I sitll enjoyed the poem I'm goingto bed now But I'm out of cheesecake. Taking over JNet, 1 thread at a time. JNet Royalty Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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