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The Dream

By Galadriel Kenobi

 

 

This is a response to Tiana's September challenge to ”œWrite a story less than 3000 words long in first person.”

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"Freedom is not the right to do what we want, but what we ought." --- Abraham Lincoln

"We must all hang together, or most assuredly we shall all hang seperately." --- Benjamin Franklin in the movie, 1776

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Wow...very short, but nicely done. I thought it was very interesting. The dream was well-written. The end seemed a bit anti-climatic...it almost seemed weird to have the real Anakin be in that time period. I almost expected him to be older for some reason--or Vader. I don't know why.

 

But I really enjoyed it. The idea is great, and it's so cool to see your writing improving more and more!

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SHE MEANS TO END US ALL!!! DOOOOOOOOMMMMMM!!!!!!!!11eleventyone!
There goes Ami's reputation of being a peaceful, nice person.
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  • 4 months later...

This is a cool story. It makes sense with that one part of the novel The Phantom Menace and it's a very realistic way for a dream to be. I've had dreams where I was more than one person at a time, and dreams where I couldn't move (by the way, nice symoblism there), so it's very realistic and easy to relate to.

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Thanks, Tiana!

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