Bad karma Posted March 13, 2007 Share Posted March 13, 2007 As per usual, I don't have a name for this. Nothing special, I just wanted to try out a first person story. Comments are welcome. ________________________________________ ”œThey said God didn't exist,” Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Malyss Posted March 13, 2007 Share Posted March 13, 2007 Ah. Yet another shiny happy story from you. And as usual another excellent piece of writing. I don't know how many times I've said it before but I'll say it again. I love your style. The first person pov gives the story more substance, makes it feel more real. So much easier to slip into the main character's shoes. The point of view also makes me suspect that this is actually a page ripped out of your autobiography. It is, isn't it. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Skye Organa Posted March 14, 2007 Share Posted March 14, 2007 Very nice, gripping tale there. Full of imagry. Another dark story straight out of the crypt. I'm glad you've decided to post another story here Josh.. great stuff. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Amidala Skywalker Posted March 15, 2007 Share Posted March 15, 2007 The point of view also makes me suspect that this is actually a page ripped out of your autobiography. It is, isn't it. Lol...he wishes. Creepy and dark as always. Well written, though. Glad to see you putting up more stuff in here, although I think you do your best work in the RP. Like that post you made on Naboo recently, before Piccolo showed up. That was good stuff. [/rambling] SHE MEANS TO END US ALL!!! DOOOOOOOOMMMMMM!!!!!!!!11eleventyone! There goes Ami's reputation of being a peaceful, nice person. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Bad karma Posted March 15, 2007 Author Share Posted March 15, 2007 At school today I wrote up a second piece for this, not really that good but I say that about 99% of my stuff. I should have it typed up and posted soon enough. Thanks for the comments =) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Niv Posted March 16, 2007 Share Posted March 16, 2007 I think you do your best work in the RP. *nods in agreement* The rp is lucky to have an excellent writer like you. *proceeds to poke at you until you post the second part of the story* Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Skye Organa Posted March 23, 2007 Share Posted March 23, 2007 *waits with baited breath for the next installment* Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
silent88 Posted March 23, 2007 Share Posted March 23, 2007 Wow this is very well written. I never read anything unless I like the first sentence, it's a strategy I learned to avoid bad SW novels, I typically don't so it in short stories, but I still judge them and let me say yours was great it definitely set up the rest of the story and made me want to read it. Very interesting and well written, can't wait for the update. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Bad karma Posted March 23, 2007 Author Share Posted March 23, 2007 Yeah, the first line is always the most difficult just in front of the first paragraph. I know if it isn't interesting that is where I will lose a lot of people. I've had the second update done for around a week and a half, just haven't typed it yet. I suppose since you two want to read it I'll prepare it later on when I get the time. Thanks for the comments. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Anakin T Skywalker Posted April 27, 2008 Share Posted April 27, 2008 Uh-oh, watch out, clergyman. I'm not real into the vampire thing, but your description was pretty good. Thanks, Tiana! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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