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I'm doing great, Ami! I've been super busy but now that summertime has finally rolled around I finally have time to devote to more worthy pursuits...like bothering you guys . How is your insanely amazing writing going? I want to read your novel!!! Brendo!!! I've missed your crazy awesomeness too, and I think I will hang around for a bit. I've missed you all insanely. Hehehe...you know what they say, NG, third time's a charm. I really, really enjoyed reading your poems by the way. Simplicity in poetry has always impressed me more than excessive verbosity and superfluous jibber-jabber that is utterly, completely, totally, absolutely and unequivocally convoluted to the point where no one individual can comprehend even the merest semblance of meaning that the poet in question intended to convey.

Kick Ass Characters - Because the greatest plot in the world won't work if the people involved in the caper are boring!

I like how "light" (almost always a positive thing) suddenly takes on a negative connatation when the protagonist feels "light headed". I also really like how you contrast "light" (the candle flame) and dark (sulphur) because they symbolically represent the war that the soldier has been caught in. Well done! That was my favourite line too!

Ami, this piece is incredible! You mentioned you went to Africa in a PM you sent me a while back, but this post really makes your whole experience come alive. I love, love, love how how you organized your memories by sense to beautifully evoke a sense of time and place. The rough, unedited feel only adds to the rawness of this piece. A few of my favourite lines: This passage is incredibly moving to me. I love how the "foreign" becomes "a sound of comfort" as time passes, and you get to know the place and people you have chosen to spend your time with. Beautiful. Simply beautiful. I have never had Malian tea, but should I ever get the opportunity to try some I feel I know what to expect based on your vivid description. Ahh..this whole paragraph is amazing. I've read it thrice now, trying to figure out why I like it so much. The descriptions are incredible it's true, but so is the subject matter. In many respects, the place you describe is foreign to me yet I feel connected to it. Why? Because you've forged connections between your world and theirs by highlighting the commonalites while respecting the differences.There is a wonderful sense of shared humanity in this whole piece that really speaks to me. Thanks so much for sharing, Ami. I really loved reading this.

I absolutely love poetry, and this poem in particular is quite beautiful. I like how you use the word "burning" in the second line and then add the word "cool" in the third; the contrast paints a very vivid, very evocative picture even though the words themselves are so simple. I have to disagree with this statement. For one thing, I know a lot of adults who enjoy building sandcastles and playing cricket or volleyball. I actually like how this poem alludes to children, and by extension, those innocent and carefree summer days that we never truly experience as adults. Don't you miss having the entire summer off to do as you please all day? I know I do.

*tries to log out when she notices that the logout button has vanished into thin air!* "Egad! What tomfoolery be this?!" cries DV as she frantically attacks her browser with a barrage of giant pink, chinchilla shaped marshmallows. "Well you know what they say, when you can't beat 'em...join 'em!" *DV pulls Brendo, Ami, Tiana and NG into a fierce bear hug--the marshmallows, feeling left out, stand aside sullenly and shuffle their feet* Ahhh....I've missed you all!!!! How has everyone been? How are all your novels/fanfics doing? Who wants cornflakes?

KIARA!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

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"S**t" Viper thought , taken by surprise as managed to break free of the force that held her in mid air.She fell down, landing on her feet and ran towards Impious at full speed, turning slightly to the left mere seconds before she reached him ,and turned around ducking a blow.Using her saber to swipe at his feet knocking him down on the ground.

Viper took Impede's advice and decided her eyes were useless in this matter anyway.No matter how hard she tried she couldnt tell where Impede was.The whole point, she thought, was to use the darkside and let them serve as her sense's. Viper held her saber, a bit more awkwardly than she thought she should have and reached out to the darkness.And it came at her call.Weak at first but then stronger.And more of it..The darkside clouded over her mind like a thick, dark sweeping mist and formed strange symbols and words.A mixture of the two as the universe itself seemed to open up to her.And thats when she heard it.A heartbeat.Proud and stong and dark.Impious. Sensing his attack by bare seconds, she used her saber to block his attack and then pulled it away and attempted to use the saber to slash at Impious's left shoulder.

Viper narrowed her eyes and ignited the saber, struggling to sense Impious who seemed to be enjoying her himself immensely.She tunned out his taunts and concentrated, realizing that using the force was like learning to use any other thing.The more you did it, the better you got with your experience. In her mind the force formed a vague shaky image.A 'form' that seemed to be Impious.Concentrating harder, the shape became slightly clearer.She wasn't absolutely sure but she thought she knew where Impious was. She turned around, her sharp eyes catching a slight twitch of movemnet on one of the trees.It could only be Impious.Igniting the saber, she shifted her weight from one foot to the other.Getting ready to defend herself from an impending atack,when she felt Impious strike.She whirled around and used her saber to defend herself just in time.

Vipers eyes immediately fell on the double bladed one.It looked the most deadly to her for some reason that she couldnt quite understand.It was definately her weapon of choice. She picked up the double bladed one and held it in her hands, admiring every curve of the cylindrical weapon that was beautiful to behold but deadly and dangerous. "This one." Viper said, standing up to face Impede and readying herself for whatever Impede was going to teach her.

Viper inhaled and exhaled deeply.Remembering her mercenary training.She slowly focused and pushed away the pain to the back of her mind, concentrating on other things to get her mind of it.After Impede had healed it, the pain went away but the memory of it seemed to be seared in her mind.But she knew of pain.It was not knew to her.She had dealt with it before and she woul again.When she had composed herself, she looked into Impious in the eyes , calmer then before and nodded. "Yes.I'm fine nowI'm afraid I've failed your test." She said, remembering Impious reffering to it as a test to how she would react to torture. She was angry at herself now.She should have been more in control of herself.Should have reacted calmer.She had failed herself, as far as she was concerned. I am pathetic. She thought to herself angrily, wondering if the sith had made a grave mistake to consider her to have the qualities vested within a sith.

" Now get up." Viper heard those words and felyt like someone had slapped her on the face, as she remembered where she was and who she was looking at through slightly blurred eyes.Impede.It was Impious.She had met him on Coruscant.He was to train her.To be a sith.She wanted to be a sith.Was the pain worth it? No.no.Yes.She would deal with it to be a sith. Struggling, she held back the pain and got up and staggered for a while and then stood up to her full height wincing.Holding back the pain.And the raw anger she felt burning the blood in her veins.She turned to face Impious and looked at him right in the eyes and saw his pleasure at her pain.And at that moment Viper felt nothing but rage and blind fury for him. Without thinking she punched him hard.Right in the gut with all the power and anger she could muster.Her hate larger than life. Her feelings focused on nothing but the hate.