Ryoo Jaxxon

Hey, you already know how I feel about the start. Not too shabby. I'm inerested in where you'll be taking this since the first bit kept it wide open. Keep writing and I'll keep coming back to read it

favorite poem yet... but you already know that keep making them like this.

double post bump.... when do we get an update?? This story was RAWT, I was hoping for more

Nat, that really made my day this morning. I'm tired, sick, and want to be done with classes... and it was 8am on a Monday morning. Nothing brightens your mood than friends. And we'll meet some day, don't worry

Ohh, order 66. It would be awesome if you didn't meet up with main characters, and somehow got with a jedi before the order was given and helped him/her escape. I don't know how far ahead you've planned the story, but whatever happens, I'm liking it (Although I agree with Nat about the money. Probably could have come across it in a different way). Keep it coming

Haha, I would, but I'm sure you remember how good I am with actually sticking to stories. I've got too much ADD to continue a story. Heck, sometimes I don't have the focus even finish a sig I'm working on. But, I'm gonna help Nat a little with ideas, and let her do all of the work on her story. Ami, I'm already ready for an update. When are we going to see the next installment?

I like this idea a lot Ami! I guess I wasn't much of a reader back when other people were doing this. A serious version sounds like it could be very interesting. Keep them coming, and you'll have me coming back to read more

I'd totally agree. Much better, but still slightly off...

I think the one from 2am is my favorite yet And I agree with Ami. The emotion an imagery really come through. This newest one though... not my fav I was feeling it at the beginning, but I think it sort of fell apart towards the end. When the lines started getting longer, the piece sort of lost what it was building up. I dunno. But if you do re-work it, I would keep the beginning for sure.

Gotta be honest, I've got nothing for this one. But I always have to comment on your poems so I don't get yelled at, so you get this. I guess I like the abab rhyme scheme. I don't have the mental capacity for more than a few letters...

Yeah, I have to agree with Mythie. It definitely has a poetry club feel. Not my kind of thing, but very well written.

I love to cook. Both my mom and dad always cooked for us. So regardless of which place I was at, I was eating home cooked food. I guess it kind of made me want to do it too. When at college or work, I tend to always cook for myself, and it often ends up with me cooking for my roommates too. You save so much money by cooking for yourself instead of going out. I've also found that girls love a guy who can cook. A fancy meal at a restaurant will cost you 60 bucks for the two of you. Or, you can buy everything yourself and cook a steak dinner with wine for half that.

I liked it When I was reading this poem it reminded me of the thoughts I have when I look up at the stars and ponder the whole universe. We seem to forget how big everything really is, and how small we are in the whole scheme. Don't have any name ideas though. Also, I liked that it was short I used to hate long poetry.

haha for some reason I'm not surprised at all that you're a klutz. Somehow, at like 6'3'' 215lbs, I'm oddly agile. It also helps that I don't really bruise. So even if I do hit something, there's no proof afterwards. I'd say my only problem is my height. I often lose my hat when I hit a fan or a doorway somewhere with a low ceiling.

I was never much of a poem fan, but overall I liked what you did. On the children of summer piece, I was hoping you would keep it vague. By adding in sandcastles and volleyball you made it undoubtedly about human children. If you had used other things which describe summer it would have been a much broader idea. I dunno if that makes sense or not. But other than that one idea, they were very good.